For Day 20 of NaPoWriMo, The site organisers suggest we attempt an erasure poem. To do this,
we take an existing piece of text- possibly another poem, although it
could be any piece of writing- and delete certain words to alter the
meaning.
The year before
last I used the lyrics to an Erasure tune and erased some of the
words to create a strange poem. This
year, I used the plot to the David Lynch film, Eraserhead.
I found this synopsis on Wikipedia. It's a
surreal movie to begin with- as are all Lynch movies- so I only had
to cut a few conjunctions and pronouns, then format.
Man in the Planet
moving levers floating in the sky.
A spermatozoon-like
creature emerges
from Spencer's
mouth, floating into the void.
an industrial
cityscape, Spencer walks home filled with
piles of dirt and
dead vegetation.
carve a chicken
the bird moves and
writhes on the plate and gushes blood.
mother,
tries to kiss him.
X has had his child
X, however, is not
sure if what she bore is a child.
caring for the
child—a swaddled bundle
with an inhuman,
snakelike face,
resembling the
spermatozoon
infant refuses all
food, crying incessantly, intolerably.
sound drives X
hysterical, she leaves Spencer and the child.
Spencer attempts to
care for the child, it struggles to breathe,
has developed
painful sores.
Spencer
experiencing visions, again seeing the Man in the Planet,
the Lady in the
Radiator sings to him as
she stomps upon
miniature replicas of Spencer's child.
a sexual encounter
with the Beautiful Girl Across the Hall,
Spencer has another
vision,
seeing him get
decapitated,
a stump underneath
resembles the child's face.
Spencer's head
sinks into a pool of blood, falls from the sky,
landing on a street
below.
A boy finds it,
bringing it to a pencil factory to be turned into erasers.
Spencer
seek out the
Beautiful Girl Across the Hall,
she has begun
taking other men home.
Crushed, Spencer
returns to his room,
child crying.
a pair of scissors:
for the first time removes the child's swaddling.
the child has no
skin; the bandages held its internal organs together,
they spill apart.
The child gasps in pain,
Spencer cuts its
organs with the scissors.
The wounds gush a
thick liquid, covering the child.
power in the room
overloads, lights flicker;
child grows to huge
proportions.
the lights burn out
completely,
the child's head
replaced by the planet.
Spencer, in his
normal form, billowing cloud of eraser shavings.
side of planet
bursts apart, inside,
Man in the Planet
struggles with levers, now emitting sparks.
Spencer embraced
warmly by the Lady in the Radiator,
both white light
and white noise crescendo
screen turns black
and silent.
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